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Brendon wakes up when his phone vibrates across the nightstand and clunks to the floor. Shane groans into Brendon's armpit and flails a little in his sleep.

Brendon yawns widely. "You're old," he tells the top of Shane's head, leaning over the bed to fumble for the phone on the floor. "I'm not jetlagged at--" he has to break off for another jaw-cracking yawn--"at all." He pulls the phone toward him with his fingertips until he can scoop it up and settle back in bed to read the new text from Sarah.

hows hawaii?

Prty, he sends back, looking out the window at the ocean and absently combing through Shane's hair with his fingers. Shn is old. Dsnt want 2 wk up.

He gets a reply a few seconds later. LOL Regan says blow him

He grins and rolls his eyes a little. Grls nite? Dors Day agn?

Hepburn and cosmos and only if u count Ry and Spence as girls

i do if there drnkng csmos

taking the 5th

Brendon laughs, and Shane pinches him. Brendon grabs the punishing fingers, and kisses them when Shane glares. Brendon holds up one finger, gesturing to his phone with his head. Shane sighs and puts his head back down with a soft bite to Brendon's ribs.

not foolin me, Brendon taps out, aware that he's losing interest in the conversation as Shane's knee inches over Brendon's thigh.

but theyre making out so not rly watching the movie

cosmos grlier thn Hpbrn, Brendon argues. Shane is mouthing at his ribcage. It's nice.

u r really critical 4 someone who promised his mom a pic of kissing his boyfriend under a waterfall

cosmos grlier thn wtrfll kss. george of the jngl did a wtrfll kiss nbdy mnlier

george and ursula never kiss under the falls george seduces her with puffy cheeks ttl FTL

Brendon considers this for a moment. He looks down at Shane and puffs out his cheeks like George of the Jungle. Shane raises an eyebrow at him and puffs his own cheeks back. Brendon smiles. they wnt bck n made the bb thr. trst me

smartass. go blow Shane hes wasting hawaii. luv u

u 2, Brendon sends, and sets the phone on the nightstand. Shane looks up at him, smiling sleepily.

Brendon slides down the bed to do as he's told.



Art and Music: Amazing Extras by Big Bang Creators ~*~ Final Notes ~*~ Return to Part One
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Date: 2010-06-18 10:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] beatzz.livejournal.com
This was really great! The shift of perspectives through the chapters made for an interesting narrative, and I love how you got to see the goings-on through a lot of different eyes. The unfolding of the plot was done really well and kept me interested about how everyone factored into things.

The Jon and Shane chapters were awesome, and I love the backstory you had for the Brendon/Shane. The bit about the Disneyland Urie Seal of Approval made me wibble, and Jon's exasperation at being caught up while being clueless rang so true.

Anyway, before this gets really long-winded, I'll just end this with - this was really awesome, all the characters and the characterizations, the misunderstandings and how they got resolved. Just everything was excellent! Thank you for sharing ♥

Date: 2010-06-18 11:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mrsquizzical.livejournal.com
oh! his mom wants a picture of him and his boyfriend? i'm going to fall apart here. thankyouuuuu!

i'm so excited that you've finally posted after all this time. :D


Date: 2010-06-18 11:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] harriet-vane.livejournal.com
So much of it is so painful, but you wrap it up in cuddles in the end. You teased us FOREVER with this. <3 I am so glad it's done! <333333333333333333

Date: 2010-06-18 01:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reni-days.livejournal.com
This made my heart hurt. As always, you are an amazing writer. ♥

Date: 2010-06-18 06:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chica-go.livejournal.com
This was the story I hoped we would get out of BBB. I absolutely loved this! :D

Date: 2010-06-19 05:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] frausorge.livejournal.com
I really liked how the different sets of relationships are juggled here, how vividly each person's situation is realized from their own point of view. Lovely!

Date: 2010-06-19 04:50 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] greedy_dancer
This was truly amazing. The amount of work and planning that must have gone into this, and the different points of view, and the details and the descriptions and everything ... I really had a great - and heartbreaking - time in the verse. I'll be back, that's for sure :)

Thank you for sharing!

Date: 2010-06-19 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vaginasandsuch.livejournal.com
oh my god this was so great! i LOVE shane and regan in this, and that is no small feat. they're just this bubble of open communication and functionality outside the faily madness that is panic. the ethical slut! i fucking LOVE that book.

i love the different ways that jealousy is portrayed - keltie feeling jealous of anyone who sleeps with ryan, spencer only sometimes feeling jealous of people who sleep with ryan, shane never feeling jealous until it is clear he's been ousted for sarah, jon angry that no one will tell him what's going on... i love how complicated every character is. i love that spencer recognized ryan's markings on bden. i even love how much jon loves cassie (also no small feat).

this was an amazing read and i'm so excited it exists! i've been waiting for some functional polyamory around here. fantastic! ♥

Date: 2010-06-20 07:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yetunknown.livejournal.com
Ryan and Spencer's relationship in this is so fascinating to me. How they started out and how they kept a truce for years but then they reach that point where it's all or nothing. and I loved how it affected everyone around them and how their history together lended so much more to the story.

Jon's chapter made me go 'oh, Jon Walker' because they kept leaving him out and from personal experience, that is really annoying. also, he and Cassie are awesomesauce and really adorable together.

and I love that you wrote from Shane's perspective, too. You wrote him really well.

oh, and I love Regan and Sarah. they're sassy and wise women.

man, there was so much more that I loved but it would take me forever to mention all of them.


Date: 2010-06-20 06:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] maple-mahogany.livejournal.com
Lu, this was a fun read. I enjoy open poly stories so much. Thanks for letting me participate in this one over the last year.

My heart really broke for Shane, his storyline was particularly well done, for me.

I was glad that since you included Sarah in the story that you evolved her from the 'reputation' that was put on her at the start into a quality character that belonged with him.

♥ Congrats on finishing!

Date: 2010-06-20 10:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] betterthanirina.livejournal.com
Oh, it was amazing. Sad and somehow just right

Date: 2010-06-23 03:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pr-scatterbrain.livejournal.com
This was such a complex and wonderful read. I really loved how you made each character and pairing feel real - fragile and painful and so deeply human. Lovely work.

Date: 2010-06-23 04:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flamingsword.livejournal.com
Awww! You are the shmoopiest shmooperson to ever live. You may have to change your name. To Shmoo. I <♥> YOU ANYWAY.

It's good to finally get to read all of this together, to see how the hurt and guilt and projection all interlock into a love story with issues AND A HAPPY ENDING. You do this so well!

And you got the polyamory-friend-testing tone just right for the Reagan-Sarah dynamic. And Sarah wasn't a douceface! Nobody was an unrelieved villain, they were all just getting screwed up by the domino effect of Ryan's issues. (I always blame Ryan's issues ... maybe I have a Ryan issue. /o\)

Date: 2010-06-24 11:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sceaterian.livejournal.com
This was really amazing and not at all what I expected. I was pleasantly surprised when I discovered the Ryan/Spencer dynamic was the core of the story. The Spencer/Shane bits were just the tasty, tasty frosting.

Mixing metaphors. Maybe I shouldn't have stayed up all night reading.

Date: 2010-06-24 10:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cda-cdj.livejournal.com
Ok, all done. :)

I had to flail my arms a little and grin it out. This was very very good, darling. And since I normally avoid Ryan/Spencer, that is something to be said indeed! You really are a terrific writer, and I wish you didn't have things like life and work and all those other trivial things getting in the way of writing moar.

Date: 2010-06-25 02:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] glitterglam13.livejournal.com
This was amazing. Such a nuanced story. I loved the tone and the different POVs and I adored the scene with the resolution of Shane and Brendon's relationship. I really liked how you used the canon; how fleshed out every character was and the way you dealt with the complexities of all of the relationships.

Date: 2010-06-25 04:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] impromptu-love.livejournal.com
So I have a tendency to be overly complimentary when commenting on fic that I really enjoy. I want you to know that this comment is not overly complimentary. I am not just saying that I love it because I like it a lot. I am saying that I love it because I love it.

Every character and every perspective felt so real; their feelings were complicated enough that they were practically breathing; the way you wrote the different relationships was incredible. I actually did the whole saving-quotes-to-talk-about-later-in-a-comment thing, which I never do.

"Nothing's perfect, George Ryan Ross, no matter how much you dream."
I think this sums up one of the best characterisations of Ryan: the cynic who doesn't have faith in anything, but is always dreaming and hoping to achieve the ideal.

He's worked so hard to be in love with her; he doesn't want her to be sad.
This is kind of heart breaking. It's brilliant and wonderful, and an aspect of sometimes functional relationships that is rarely addressed.

Especially since I think Brendon's going to put orange juice on his Frosted Flakes again; you know that freaks me out."


Ryan falls down a lot and Jon laughs at him and Ryan communes with the parts of nature he doesn't trip over.

I find hilarious.

Spencer doesn't let himself hate Ian even a little bit, and concentrates on his own breathing at night in the tour bus without Ryan's snores to set his heartbeat to.
I'm not sure why, but the last bit of this is absolutely devastating.

Bun mostly just, oh god, I didn't want this to end. The relationships fit my personal fannon perfectly, at least as far as Ryan and Spencer are involved. In my head, there's plenty of fun and sex between bandmates, and lots of caring, and Ryan and Brendon have some moments, as do Spencer and Brendon, but mostly it's not serious, and all the while, Ryan and Spencer are totally in love with each other and pining and hurting and things.

Also, just fyi, this has kinda inspired me to keep working on ym own fic...and just...I don't know. This really spoke to me, for some reason.

Thank you!

Date: 2010-06-26 04:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] allyndra.livejournal.com
This is so, so good! I love that the miscommunication about Spencer's part in the threesome makes sense. Like, I could completely understand both how Spencer said it and how Ryan took it without strecthing (which is awesome, becasue sometimes the miscommunications in fiction make me pity the lack of brainpower on the characters' parts). And I love their pining, and Jon's observation of it. :D I had such a lump in my throat for Shane when Brendon said he was taking Sarah home. I'm so glad it worked out.

Thank you for sharing!

Date: 2010-06-28 12:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pck-c-toi.livejournal.com
Ok, I'm kinda speechless.
I wasn't sure at the start, because I'm not a fan of fics with lots of POVs and where almost everybody is gay but I'm really really really glad I gave it a shot.
Your writing is amazing, as the story and the plot. Everybody's feelings are true and beautiful and there's self-sacrifice and misunderstanding, and you didn't turn the girls in sluts (and I'm rambling.)

My only regret is the happy ending (I'm a angst lover) but the epilogue is really funny so it"s ok

Long comment short : mems + delicious right away !

(sorry for the mistakes, I'm not fluent and it's almost 3AM here ^^')

Date: 2010-06-30 03:45 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] vixalicious
Wonderful story, and so fun to read it all in one piece now! ♥
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Date: 2010-07-12 01:13 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] crazybutsound
Thank you SO MUCH for this. This story gripped me and refused to let me go. I've been going around all day with your characters living in my head and not moving anywhere. I've gone from ecstatic to crushed back to happy again... This is THE best BBB read so far for me. So yes, thank you for writing this. <3

Date: 2010-07-15 07:11 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] tenshinochouwa
So I always have really ambitious goals about reading all the BBB stories in a timely fashion and always fail miserably. So, late feedback is late. But: this was so wonderful. I loved the different points of view, and how at times we knew more than they did but each one still taught us new stuff about the situation. Shane's was so heart-wrenching for so many reasons but so well done. It was especially hard when Sarah came on the screen because I wanted to like her, but she just made Shane so sad... but it all worked out wonderfully. I totally had a hilarious "Aha!" moment where I realized why Ryan broke up with Panic and was very impatient waiting for that to be solved (also wonderful. Ryan+Spencer=OTP that I forget I have). Also, mad props on how well this fits in the timeline (or just plain changes the timeline a little bit so as to make it much better in the long run.) Really awesome fic, definitely going in my list of BBB recs for my roommate.

Date: 2010-08-25 02:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] casey_sms.livejournal.com
This was beautiful. Ryan/Spencer is awesome. Lovely POV changes and a great view on poly and jealousy. The want and longing in this is so poignant and heartbreaking. Jon totally snuck up on me in this one but Spencer was the show stopper.

Thanks for writing and sharing.

Date: 2010-09-26 01:27 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] mayqueen517.livejournal.com
This was such an interesting and totally in depth view of the band, their relationships, and how it ended (and somehow came back together in a way).

I loved this. So much.
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